This story has some nice imagery in it. There are a few typos that distract from it a little (but, maybe only to me). I think though, however masterfully begun, the "positive end of infirmary," comment is meant to say "positive end of infamy," but, I did look up infirmary, and it works, so I can't be sure that wasn't intended. It seemed as though the description of their "love affair" was somehow out of place, maybe it should come earlier? I am sure it's just me, but somehow, it seemed bumpy. In any case, please don't let anything I have said discourage you! I am new to the site, and perhaps my perception is what is off. Best of luck to you!
3/31/2012 8:31:42 PM
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