Till Death Do We Part
The storyline was a good premise. Some suggestions:
Maybe the girl assuages her guilt by watching the Kardashian
wedding repeatedly, so that her motive is caused by her overdosing
on all things that glitter. How, did she kill him?
Furthermore, the story may have more heft if she lives a good
life for awhile, then gets caught. Her defense would be it was not
her fault but the media pushing the dream of living as that fairy
princess, that caused her mental breakdown.
Her lawyer would suggest the Kardashian defense.
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Wily Geist
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Created on:
11/3/2011 12:41:55 PM
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Oh, that's not nice.
I liked this story. It kept me interested in how she would get her money. I was able to picture her well and the expression of the banker. I would have liked to see some irony in it. I kinda expected her to be left empty handed after all. Maybe that was good though. It gave me the unexpected. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
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Susan Quinn
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Created on:
10/19/2011 9:31:35 AM
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