Story
I liked the story! You did a good job of just jumping into it, plunging the reader right into the world of the character. The ending was a tad mysterious too, leaving me thinking and wondering, which was good.
There were just a few grammatical errors, such as a word that wasn't capitalized after an ended sentence, and "Guys" was capitalized on page 3 and I don't think it should have been.
Other than that, it was a good story! Nicely done.
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Karlin K Jensen
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3/18/2013 10:39:21 PM
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David, I think this story was very good and very well written. :):):) I know the feeling about no reviews. I get the stars a lot with no review. This is a very interesting story and IF you decide to make a sequel to it I will read it with baited breath to find out why the character has to wait till he is 21 to find out the secret. :) You leave me very curious!
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Linda Pickens Phalen
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3/18/2013 10:10:49 PM
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