Picture of Extraordinary

It was just a regular day for Jox Workings, delivering guns and artillery to The African Taliban. Then a human skull appears on the road, out of nowhere. He gets out his van to check things out, and discovers that the skull is a setup.

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Word Count 1700
File Format Book will be delivered as a PDF download.
Current rating is 3.60. Total votes 5.
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Not bad
It could still use a bit of work. The storyline was very creative, but I would suggest a bit more work on your grammar.

From: Aaron Chain | Created on: 3/6/2013 12:18:23 AM

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This author has a dynamic voice!

From: Thomas Warford | Created on: 2/27/2013 12:06:48 PM

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I'll admit this is a big improvement from your previous stories. At least this time the story wasn't in every single genre. The dialogue was good and the writing was decent.

On to some improvements needed in the story: try to be a little clear on the setting and detail of the story.

Also what confused me is how did the character know how to speak "lion" language?

From: Zach Heher | Created on: 2/20/2013 11:38:17 AM

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